Could use some help.

[CoreyD]

Originally Posted by Emjaysmash

I like the design, but I'll tell you that the paragraphs in the "about" and "home page" section need re-writing.

As in punctuation? Or rewrite in general?

Originally Posted by pnoon

And get rid of the third person form. Very impersonal and distant. It should be written in the first person.

On Home or about?

I thank You both for feedback. Selling yourself about yourself is one of the hardest things to do. Its easier to people that know me and have seen my work or have heard me speak, or just know what I've been through and am about.But to open it up on a professional level without the schooling besides life as my backbone it makes it a difficult journey that makes it to where all I can do ask ask the lord and people for help, therefore making me swallow my humility and be humble as I grow. Which is the hardest thing for me to do. Its like I can give but is hard to receive sometimes.

[Emjaysmash]

Originally Posted by CoreyD

As in punctuation? Or rewrite in general?

Both.

[pnoon]

Originally Posted by CoreyD

On Home or about?

Both.