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Originally Posted by RevSmoke

I like the idea Corey, that you want to share your struggles to help other through theirs - a laudable goal

As for what you have written on your "home" page and "about" page your punctuation and writing need some work. Getting rid of the 3rd person approach is just the beginning. When you write on a forum such as this, you can get away with just writing and posting. A couple punctuation mistakes or mistypings are not a problem.

If you want to get speaking engagements, you need to sell yourself on your website. OK, you are someone who not only has a story to tell, but you must entice them into thinking that you also tell it in an engaging way.

Your website is your sales pitch, what does it say about you? It isn't just if your story is interesting, but it is your putting together phrases and your use of grammar, that will be selling points. If you want to be a speaker, you also need to be able to communicate clearly in written form, and most people cannot just write, shooting from the hip - but they think they can speak, shooting from the hip.

Here's a thought. Make your changes, then go through and read it as if you know nothing about who you are or what you are trying to do or say.

Peace of the Lord be with you.

Excellent advice.